What I based the grade on:

5 pts Was I interested? Did the narrative draw the reader in.

5 pts Mechanics: Structure, Format, and Grammar.

5 pts Clarity: Was the narrative easy to follow? Was there a clear direction the narrative was going?

5 pts Overall tone and message.

5 pts Completed the overall assignment: Remixes, Process, and Links.

Sugestions and Comments:

5/5 Was I interested? Yes. I enjoyed the fact that you started off your narrative with a scenario. I liked the fact it was in a story type of format. In reading the opening I was instantly pulled in. It made me reflect on my own past experiences in college. The sample website was also a great addition to the narrative. It will be a good assit for students, and hopefully the website will come alive.

5/5 Mechanics: The structure, format, and grammar in your narrative seemed like it was on the mark. Everything seemed to transition to each phase of your narrative.

5/5 Clarity: In your narrative it was easy to follow. It had a clear direction of where you were taking the readers. The transitions were also really good, I did not trip over anything sentences as I was reading. An overall, excellent job.

5/5 Overall tone and Message: The Overall tone and message was strong. You brought into your narrative good key ideas. The ideas expressed in the narrative was well thought out. Also, seeing that we are all students I really like that every reader in our class can really relate to your narrative.  The only thing I would suggest is maybe adding your own personal situation to the narrative. So,  that the reader can get an idea where you are coming from personally. But, overall very good job.

5/5 Completed the overall assignment: Everything looks complete. I love your remix of Kelly's narrative and your cover page looks great.

 TOTAL: 25/25

Nickel