Notes

I must say, Mili is an excellent writer. After reading her narrative on outsourcing, I was not only informed about a topic I had no idea about, I was also extremely impressed by her skill. I found almost no grammatical or spelling errors, very good work Mili.

Grammar

Economists and industry analysts say that because of outsourcing, companies are saving costs and increasing profit, on the other hand the American economy is suffering since not only the low-paying jobs but the high-tech ones are also moving away from America.

I felt that this sentence was a bit of a "run-on". I would change it to:

Economists and industry analysts say that as a result of outsourcing, companies are saving costs and increasing profit. However, the American economy is still suffering due to not only the abundance of low-paying jobs, but the increase of high-tech jobs relocating to overseas countries.

They have also been saying outsourcing is bad for our economy and is increasing unemployment and poverty, Outsourcing makes the Company loose control of their process, and they loose managerial control as it is easier to manage their own employees than those working outside.

I felt that this also should be broken up into two sentences and that 'loose' should be changed to 'lose'.

It has also been said that outsourcing is bad for our economy and has a direct relation to the increasing unemployment and poverty. Outsourcing results in the company losing control of their processes, as well as their managerial control of outside employees.

Bottom line, get the job done for less money.

Bottom line: get the job done for less money.

Rubric for Rhetorical Use in Narratives

Do I want to read it again?

Yes

Do I understand it's purpose?

Yes, the purpose of her narrative was to inform the reader of the current economic issue of outsourcing and how this is affecting americans everyday.

Would a recognizable community of users understand the writer's purpose?

Absolutely. I think that a recognizable community of users would definitely understand the writer's purpose and that more people should be aware of this issue so that something can be done about it.

Do I want to actualize any of the goals of the paper?

Yes, I belive that she makes very valid points and took the time to write about a very important issue that our country is facing. I would like to see some of these goals actualized and something done about the relocation of all of these jobs.

Are these goals ascertainable, that is, can I find the document's "starting points" and assumptions (premises)?

Yes, the goals are ascertainable, however it is going to take the willingness of our government to change this.

Can I recognize and follow the lines of narrative, argument, and inquiry it promises and endeavors to develop?

Yes, I can clearly recognize and follow the lines of the narrative and it's argument.

Can I follow the directives it offers to users?

No, I did not find any directives offered to users. She wrote very clearly about this argument, but did not tell the reader what they could do or who they could contact to help this issue.

Have I come away from the narrative with a fresh perspective on the topic(s)?

Absolutely. I did not realize the extreme effects of outsourcing until I read her paper.

Grading Grid

5/5 pts Interesting narrative

4/5 pts Structure, Format, and Grammar.

5/5 pts Clarity: Was the narrative easy to follow? Was there a clear direction the narrative was going?

5/5 ptsOverall tone and message.

5/5 pts Completed the overall assignment: Remixes, Process, and Links

24/25pts

This is Nickel's grading grid that I found very helpful in this process.