Notes

First off, I want to say this is an excellent narrative. The pictures instantly catch the reader's eye and make it even more interesting to read. I also felt that this would be a very valuable read for high school seniors or even those looking for a career change, and possibly considering returning to college. This narrative effectively outlines the importance of a college education.

Grammar

It's May 5 2000, the year of the new millennium.

I would change the format of the date to May 5, 2000, adding a comma.

The laughter and joy of walking across the stage of accomplishment is almost overwhelming.

It is an overwhelming feeling, and quite an accomplishment to walk across that stage as you hear the laughter and joy of your fellow classmates.

I can only imagine the thoughts going through each one of their barley adult minds.

Change the spelling of ‘barely’.

I am not saying that it is necessary to take time off of school, but it could most certaintly be helpful for some during their course of self-discovery.

Change the spelling of ‘certainly’.

For those of you who are uncertain, do not rush it school is always a possibility no matter what age you are.

If you are uncertain as to what is for you, a higher education is always a possibility at any age.

Rubric for Rhetorical Use in Narratives

Do I want to read it again?

Yes

Do I understand it's purpose?

To inform the reader of the importance of a higher education and portray the excitement of leaving for college after high school graduation.

Would a recognizable community of users understand the writer's purpose?

Absolutely, it is very easy to read and understand. I also feel that most can relate to her work.

Do I want to actualize any of the goals of the paper?

Yes, I would like to hear more about her experiences.

Are these goals ascertainable, that is, can I find the document's "starting points" and assumptions (premises)?

Yes, you can easily find her starting point and her goals. Even though they change a bit as she experiences the world on her own, they are very easy to find.

Can I recognize and follow the lines of narrative, argument, and inquiry it promises and endeavors to develop?

Yes, I can recognize and follow the lines of her narrative. I wouldn't quite categorize it as an argument, but more of an informative to high school seniors contemplating college.

Can I follow the directives it offers to users?

Yes, her directives are about figuring out what is best for you and how to go about that. She talks about picking a major, researching career possiblities, and choosing a college or university based on your needs or wants. She wants the reader to learn from her experiences and make sure that they are ready for what ever they choose and to really think about things before jumping in head first.

Have I come away from the narrative with a fresh perspective on the topic(s)?

Yes, I have. It gives the reader a fresh perspective on college and the choices and decisions you will encounter when becoming independent for the first time.

Grading Grid

5/5 pts Interesting narrative

4/5 pts Structure, Format, and Grammar.

5/5 pts Clarity: Was the narrative easy to follow? Was there a clear direction the narrative was going?

5/5 pts Overall tone and message.

5/5 pts Completed the overall assignment: Remixes, Process, and Links

24/25pts

This is Nickel's grading grid that I found very helpful in this process.