Notes

First of all, I was very intrigued by the introduction sentence. This sentence was a great way to grab the reader's attention and get them interested. There were a few grammatical and spelling errors, but overall a good narrative.

Grammar

Imagine your out one day and you find yourself being mugged.

Change your to you're, as in 'you are'.

The money being spent on marijuana arrests,anti-marijuana propoganda, and other facets of the "War on Drugs" is just not worth it.

Change the spelling of propoganda to propaganda.

It;s pretty much known that the war on marijuana costs us billions and reaps little to no benefit.

Change It;s to It's.

Of all the felons arrested for marijuana possession between 1980-1992, 58% had no prior record and 92% of them hadn't owned or possessed a gun.

Of the felons arrested for marijuana possession between 1980 and 1992, 58% of them had no prior record and 92% did not own or possess a gun.

Opponents of decriminilization want to blame drugs for turf wars, shootings, robberies, etc.

Opponents of decriminalization blame drugs for turf wars, shootings, robberies and the majority of crime in America.

(Changing the format and spelling of decriminalization)

After all, the marijuana policy , much like other drug policies, we follow now was used to persecute people that the government wanted to push out of mainstream society- I.E. Mexicans and African Americans.

Similar to other drug policies, the marijuana policy we currently follow has been used to persecute people that the government was trying to push out of mainstream society, such as Mexicans and African Americans.

Its obvious the current marijuana policy doesn't keep criminals contained, but instead hinders millions of smokers who are otherwise law abyding citizen.

Change the spelling of abyding to abiding.

Former President Jimmy Carter said it best in his speech to Congress

" Penalties against possession of a drug should not be more damaging to an individual than the use of the drug itself; and where they are, they should be changed. Nowhere is this more clear to me than in the laws against possession of marijuana in private for personal use." That was written in 1977, we're long due for a change

Former President Jimmy Carter said it best in his speech to Congress in 1977:

" Penalties against possession of a drug should not be more damaging to an individual than the use of the drug itself; and where they are, they should be changed. Nowhere is this more clear to me than in the laws against possession of marijuana in private for personal use." Well said, but a lot has changed in our society over last 30 years, we're due for a change.

Rubric for Rhetorical Use in Narratives

Do I want to read it again?

Yes

Do I understand it's purpose?

To inform the reader that society is constantly changing and therefore, the current laws should reflect this. However, they do not. He wants to argue the point of changing the current drug policies.

Would a recognizable community of users understand the writer's purpose?

Yes, they would. Although a recognizable community of users may not agree, they would be able to clearly understand the writer's purpose.

Do I want to actualize any of the goals of the paper?

Yes, I believe that he makes a valid point and I would like to hear more of his points about this subject.

Are these goals ascertainable, that is, can I find the document's "starting points" and assumptions (premises)?

The goals are somewhat ascertainable. I can find the starting points and assumptions, but as far as actually achieving this goal of changing the drug laws I believe is going to be an extremely difficult task.

Can I recognize and follow the lines of narrative, argument, and inquiry it promises and endeavors to develop?

Yes, I can clearly recognize and follow the lines of the narrative and it's argument.

Can I follow the directives it offers to users?

Yes, I can follow the directives he offers to users. He urges you to speak out to you local government and politicians, to form groups and to defend this matter before it affects a loved one in your life.

Have I come away from the narrative with a fresh perspective on the topic(s)?

Yes, I definitely have. It was a very interesting read and I enjoyed the points he made.

Grading Grid

5/5 pts Interesting narrative

2/5 pts Structure, Format, and Grammar.

5/5 pts Clarity: Was the narrative easy to follow? Was there a clear direction the narrative was going?

5/5 ptsOverall tone and message.

5/5 pts Completed the overall assignment: Remixes, Process, and Links

22/25pts

This is Nickel's grading grid that I found very helpful in this process.